Writing About Writing 

By Zeke Opot 

The kid opened his mouth and I sighed

A sea of words would suffocate my ears soon enough

The line above is ridiculous. Overly complicated to convey a simple message

It’s too unsatisfactory to read poems like this

Look at how long line one was

Versus line two

These are the symple problems I’ll be addressing in today’s poem

I also wanted to say that anything beginning in sy isn’t automatically cool

To start I would like to revise the 1st stanza

My soul started to cry as soon as I heard the kid speak

This is an example of word econominism

That is a made up word I just said

Neither of the lines in the stanza above were proper grammer

I’m keeping this poem intentionally insatisfying

The tipe of poem to make one quit poetry

Do you understand the problems I am shedding light on

No?

Good

You can’t read this poem rhythmically or happily

Every line brings a new lash of pane

A neverending story 

I could rephrase stanza 2

The line above fails to convey a simple message with it’s ludicrousness

Let’s try a different example this time

The girl sobbed uncontrollably, an ocean of sorrow reflected in the ceaseless depths of her eyes

That was abominable to read

Far too long and lost itself in trying to convey the message

Wait a minute

What is this poem about?

Zeke Opot is 14 years old just moving through the motions of life as they happen.